Love the Girl, Not the Ride – Friday Fictioneers – 05/12/17


Julie loved being with Tucker. He was the kind of guy every girl wanted. She knew that was true because they could go nowhere without every single girl staring. But Tucker always reassured her by clasping her hand tighter as they walked. Until he didn’t.

Julie watched, listened and supposed what was to blame. Was it Christina, Maddie, or  Victoria? Eventually she realized it was the new car. Tucker treated it better than her when they first met.

So she made her point, first by smashing the rear view, then with a baseball bat she bashed off the side view.



26 thoughts on “Love the Girl, Not the Ride – Friday Fictioneers – 05/12/17

  1. There’s some sort of song on popular radio about a woman whose boyfriend is cheating on her, taking a baseball bat to his prized truck in revenge. There’s room for only one love in your life.


  2. Hi Joe,
    I really enjoyed this and felt it had a touch of originality about it, although my flash last week had an IT geek who was overly fond of his computer network.
    I hope you don’t mind, but I was looking at the syntax in your last line and thought it could be tightened up a little.Something like:
    So, she made her point. First, by smashing the rear view. Then, she bashed off the side view with a baseball bat. I would possibly even add something like “Done” to finish it off.
    I’m not sure if syntax varies in different countries. I’m Australian and we’d tend to use multiple full stops in this instance than commas.
    You could probably edit my comment and find some errors. Much easier to pick them up in someone else’s writing and I’ve had a big day.
    xx Rowena

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    1. My wife loves to declare she is not the jealous type. I am not sure she understands how that sounds, but I know I am and would be fetching a heavyweight Louisville Slugger for some work!😂

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  3. Moral of the story: don’t ever forget that your girlfriend/wife/partner is more important than your car (or anything else!) This was a good story and a fun (and slightly scary!) read.

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